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ZXKatana
02-17-2008, 03:58 PM
I have seen plenty of, "never ending stories" and such. But i have never actually seen a story written by a SINGLE person. So here goes my story. I'll write a little once in a while, and even if this thread is dead, i'll revive it until i'm done, or i quit :xd:.

Rules:
No flaming
No spamming
No ranting

Accepted:
Biographies (If you want to be in the story, i'll try to add you some how)
If you want to be in this story this should be some what what you should post
Physical Discription
Favorite Weapons
Gender
Style

Ok let's start...
Prolouge (Think i spelled this wrong)

Deru woke up like any other boy that day. Oh boy, a monday he thought... school, how fun. Slowly he dragged himself outta bed and to the bathroom. He brushed his teeth, washed his face and went to the kitchen for breakfast. 6:15 A.M the clock flashed. Deru opened the fridge and took out a cartoon of milk, chugging it down. 5 minutes later, he was on the bus to school.

At exactly 7:00 A.M, the bus reached the school. Deru took the steps two at a time and rushed into the school doors. Sure he had 20 minutes left until he was late but he always hung out with his friends in the hallway at 6:55. He was already 5 minutes late, why be later?
In the hallway, Deru's friends were already waiting. There was Clare, Sarah, Tech, and Dan. Tech punched him playfully on the shoulder and Deru returned the punch.

"So, gain any levels in gunz lately?" Tech asked.
"Naw, been mainly making alternative accounts and killing noobs in the 1-5 channel." Deru replied.
"Hahaha, don't you have any mercy for those people?"
"No, it's a game, who cares?"
Dan butted in, "You can, Gunz is basically your life Deru."
"Shut up Dan, you're just mad you could never beat me in a duel!" and Dan shut up.
Deru turned back to Tech, "So you gain any levels?"
"No, but i'm thinking about making a clan."
"Cool, what you calling it?"
"Um... i haven't figured it out yet, but i'll tell you when i know."
"Ok, also i ha-" and the bell rung, cutting Deru off.
"See you later!" Tech shouted and the gang split up. Deru ran to his locker and quickly spun the dials on his lock. 31, 57, 37, and the lock popped open. He grabbed his textbook for first period and ran to his class. Shortly after he had jumped in to the class, the bell rang. Deru took his seat and the class began...
***
Deru took his keys off his belt and unlocked his house door. He thought school would of have never ended! With jacket and bag on the floor, he booted up his computers and waited patiently for it to start up. After a few minutes, Deru clicked on the Gunz symbol on his desktop and logged in with his IJJI account. Deru clicked on the "play live" button and Gunz started. Is this what I live for? Deru thought as Gunz loaded. To play Gunz all day long? Sheesh... what am i? A nerd?Just as he was about to think more, the server selection popped up. Deru clicked on quest server 2 and went on his main character. After a quick check to see if any clanmates were on (and there weren't) he joined a room doing bosses.

Like always, Deru basically beat the entire boss by himself while all of his teammates died. It was the Goblin King too! Come on! How do you die on that? But Deru gritted his team and finished off the Fat Tub of Blubber. As soon as the boss died, Deru picked up the chest, page 65. Ugh he thought, i have 50 of these already, i don't need another one. When they got back to the lobby, Deru left the room.

I need a challenge Deru thought... something fun and challenging. Solo level 5 dungeon naked with sword only? no i already did that... Solo level 5 prison? No, that's impossible even with armor and guns. Ugh... There's nothing to do... Gunz would be alot more fun if it was real. All we would do is kill monsters, and kill each other. But we can never die cause we would just respawn! Deru laughed at himself. Gunz come real? yeah right, that'll happen when a monkey comes into my window right now. Deru began playing in a duel match but spared a glance at his window. Nope no monkey, and Deru laughed again.

That night, Deru dreamed about Gunz. He dreamed that the entire world had suddenly disappeared and turned in the Gunz world he had thought about. This is like Final Fantasy Tactis Advance he thought. The kid just goes to sleep and wakes up in some other world. Deru promptly woke up and looked around. It was daylight, and everything was still the same way he had left it. Deru pulled the cover over his head again and tried to go to sleep...
"Oh crap!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!" Deru jumped out of bed and looked as his clock. 6:57 A.M flashed on the screen. Deru swore again and ran to the bathroom, quickly brushing his teeth and giving himself a quick comb. Soon after he ran to his drawer and pulled it open. It was filled with various articals of clothing, but none he reconized.

Finally Deru reconized one of the articles of clothing. It was the head band for the finbul winter set in Gunz. He dug up his entire wardrobe only to find more clothing from Gunz. Deru looked at the clock, 7:00 A.M. Dang i gotta hurry! Deru slipped on the the Finbul Winter Set and ran to the kitchen. His mom was there making eggs and bacon.

"MOM! I'm gunna be late for school! see you!"
"What are you talking about?"
"School starts in 20 minutes!"
"I meant, what's school?"
Deru stopped, "You don't know what school is? What planet are you on? Mars?"
"No Deru, I'm on planet Gunz."
He laughed. "Gunz is a game mom, now i gotta go."
"Deru, Gunz isn't a game, this is real."
"HAHAHAHA... stop pulling my leg."
"Maybe this will help you remember..." and His mom pulled out a pair of revolvers from her pockets.
"Oh crap, I am in Gunz..." Deru breathed.

Chapter 1
Deru reached out to touch the pair of revolvers. His mom thrust them into his hands and he dropped them.
"What are you trying to do!?! Kill me?"
"...Don't you'll just come back to life in your room"
"Well this is gunz..." and Deru picked up the revolvers. He pointed them at the wall and decided to test if this really was gunz. Deru fired every single bullet at the wall and there were bullet holes left where he had fired. Several seconds later the bullet holes disappear and was replaced by the wall again. This is gunz... he thought. This is so cool! Deru ran out the door and into the middle of the street.
"I'm in GUNZ! YEAH! THIS IS SO FKING AWSOME!"
"Shut the hell up! we know where we are!"
Deru looked around. Who ever said that was asking for a fight. Deru spotted the person. It was Tech. He ran up to Tech and slapped him on the head.

"What's up Tech?"
"Not much Deru."
"What are you talking about!?! We're in GUNZ! The Best video game ever!"
"I know we are in Gunz Deru, but i don't like it here."
"Why not?"
"Every where you go, someone might kill you. Then you respawn in your room, which is pretty annoying."
"Ok besides that..."
"The only safe place is the lobby, or this worlds equivilent of downtown. There you have to challenge someone and it's forbidden to have a fight there with out permission. If you do, you could get arrested."
"Ha, there are no police in Gunz."
"Yeah there are, GM's"
"...I guess you could call them the police of Gunz..."
"Look, i'm just war-- DUCK!" and Tech threw Deru to the ground. He pulled out a pair of Sub machine guns and fired. A man screamed and he fell to the ground. Several seconds later his body disppeared.

"You see what i'm talking about? That's what happens Deru."
"Thanks Tech, but i'll be ready now."
"You sure?"
"Yeah"
"Ok" and Tech stuck is dagger into Deru. As he fell to the ground, Deru said, "What the FU-" and he disappeared. Tech fell on the ground laughing and Deru ran out of his house to Tech.

"What the hell was that for?"
"Well you said you were ready!"
"So, thought we were friends!"
"It was just a joke, come on..."
"Yeah, ok..."
"Tell you what, let's go to the ruins."
"You mean like the map ruin in Gunz?"
"Yup, lets see if we can kill anyone, have a little fun."
Deru rubbed his hands, this was gunna be fun.

Deru and Tech walked carefully through the streets, making sure they weren't being followed or anyone was ready to pop out and give them a face full of shotgun pellets. Some how they made it to the Ruins with out dying once. Deru almost died once and he noticed that he had a little computer thingy on his wrist that showed his hp, armor, ammo and variuos other useful things. Right now his hp flashed close to 0. But as time went by, his hp recovered and they were on their way back to the ruins.

At the ruins, Deru could see various people duking it out. Some were staying far away shooting from rifles while others moved at high speeds, slashing at each other with swords. Tech pulled out his sub machine guns and Deru pulled out his revolvers. A rocket hit the ground at their feet and Deru tumbled back. When he got back to his feet, he saw Tech lying on the ground.

"This sucks crunchy monkey balls..." and Tech disappeared.

Deru gritted his teeth, 5 seconds into the game and Tech had already died. Turning his head in an almost 360 degrees spin, he looked for the killer. There he was, Deru aimed his revolvers and fired. The first two bullets spun right past him and into the wall behind him. Deru concentrated and fired again, this time firing everything that was left. At least one of the bullets hit the man. Or so Deru thought, the man loaded a fresh clip into his rocket launcher and fired. The first rocket hit to his right so Deru tumbled to behind a wall. The next rocket hit the wall he was hiding behind and it crumbled to pieces. The shockwave of the rocket decreased his hp serverly. Deru kept moving and ducked behind another wall, only to have this one destroyed too. Finally as a last resort, he grabbed a person running past him and used him as a shield. The last rocket hit them both and Deru flew over the bleechers. He groaned and stood up while checking his hp. Rougly 5 hp left Deru calculated and he reloaded his revolvers. The man also began reloading his rocket, but Deru wouldn't give him a chance to fire again. He ran forward and and fired. This time he was sure of it, something had hit the man. The man slumped against the wall and he disappeared.

Deru ran to where the man was and relieved him of his rocket launched and all remained clips before the body disappeared. It was supprisingly light in his hands, it had packed such a punch... Oh well Deru thought and ran.

His choice was a wise one, several seconds from the spot where he had landed, a grenade exploded. Deru tumbled forward and covered his head from any falling debris. The light around him suddenly turned dark and he rolled to the side. A person landed where he had been and their sword dug into the ground. As they pulled it out, Deru stood up and aimed his new rocket launcher. He pulled the trigger, nothing happened. Crap i forgot to reload it he thought.

As the new killer slashed down at Deru, he brought up the rocket launcher. The sword sliced clean through the rocket launcher and Deru jumped back. What Da HELLZ? he thought, what kinda sword is that? But he didn't have time to think further, they dash forward and slashed at Deru. Just in the nick of time he ducked and punched them in the balls. Or atleast he THOUGHT were the balls. Deru looked up. Long, Blonde hair, Smexy blue eyes...Crap Deru thought, it's a girl and she sliced off his right arm. It didn't hurt though, after all it was a game. Deru stared at his arm that had fallen off, supprisingly he was calm. He reached for his revolver but the girl sliced off his other hand.

"Dam! Fine then, i'll bite you to death!"
"Dumb@$$, like you will." and she struck off his head.

Deru appeared in his room again. Tech was already there waiting.

"Dude, what took you so long to die?"
"I was killing the person that killed you."
"Oh that's cool."
"Do i get bounty in this world like Gunz?"
"Yeah, just check your computer." Deru checked his wrist, 108 bounty.
"Cool, i got 108 bounty, what can i buy?"
"Rusty sword? Newbie weapons basically."
"That stinks, oh yeah i got killed."
"I wonder why you're here then..."
"It was a girl, she had blonde hair, and blue ice eyes..."
"Wait, say that again?"
"It was a girl, she had blonde hair, and blue ice eyes!"
"Dude, do you know who that is?"
"No not really."
"She's the top killer in this world!"
"Oh crap... i touched her... you know" and Deru pointed as his balls.
"You are so screwed man! she's gunna hunt you down and keep killing you over and over again."
"Dammit, 1 day into this gunz world and i'm already screwed... But i admit she was smexy."
"She's way out of your leauge, don't bother man."
"Hey, can't a guy try?"
"You? and her? NOOOOOOO!"
"Well what's her name atleast?"
"Mira, that's her name."
"Mira huh, i gotta find her." and Deru ran outside and back to the ruins.
"Dam, i forgot to tell him she's a pro k-styler... oh well let him found out himself."

Deru made it to ruins in record time and looked around for Mira. It only took seconds to find her because she left a trail of distruction and dead bodies behind her. He reached for his revolvers incase Mira tried to attack him, but only grabbed air. Dam, i left my revs at home Deru thought and got ready to leave. But before he could leave a sword was put to his throat and he stopped. Slowly, he turned his head and was face to face with Mira. He stared into her eyes and suddenly felt calm, like he was diving into an ocean. Mira slapped him and he got back into the real world, or the gunz world atleast.

"What are you doing here! DO you want to die again?" She hissed.
"No, i just wanted to see you."
"Well i suggest you get out of here before I kill you."
"Uh yeah, i was just abou-" and she shoved him to the ground, jumping gown on the ground beside him. Several seconds later a grenade exploded where he had previuosly been.

"Phew thanks Mira. But why'd you save me?"
"...Cause i felt like it."
"C'mon there has to be a better reason why."
"You wanna know the truth?"
"Sure why not?"
Mira blushed violently, "I think your eyes are sorta cute."
Deru grinned like a mad man. "Really? I like you eyes too."
"Wait, what the fk am i saying? Yeah i think your eyes are cute but i still didn't forgive you for-you-know-what"
"Can't we just put that behind us?"
"That was roughly only half an hour ago."
"So, half an hour is a long time."
"If your asking me to be your girlfriend, screw you. You have a better chance hooking up with your mom."
Deru was torn."HEY! Why would i even ask my mom to go out with me?"
"Cause your a desperate little poor, now get outta here."
"Hellz no, not after what you just said."
"Fine, have it you way." and she drew her sword. Deru raised his fists and got ready to fight.

Deru made the first move and lunged forward. He aimed for Mira's stomach because it was open. Yet he hesitated. She was just standing there like she was daring him to hit her. But it was to late, Deru increased his speed and threw his fist forward at her. It collided with thin air, she was no longer there. He looked around quickly, then up. There she was, coming down at a rapid speed. Before her sword sunk into his head, Deru jumped to the side and it bit into the ground. He then kicked her in the chest, knocking her away from her sword. Mira slid across the floor and got back up, pulling another sword from behind her back as she went. Deru ran to Mira's old sword and tugged it out of the ground. She dashed forward, and slashed but Deru blocked this. Right after he successfully blocked her attack, Deru swung his sword foward at Mira. Mira side stepped and stabbed at him. It went right through his leg and blood started pouring out.

"Aaaargh!" Deru screamed as he clutched his leg. Mira stopped moving and held her sword behind her head.
"What is that? Ketchep? Lame."
"Dammit this is blood not ketchep!"
"Wat Da Hellz is blood?"
Deru thought for a moment. In gunz there wasn't suppose to be blood and there wasn't suppose to be any pain. He looked at Mira and quickly cut her arm with her own sword. It was shallow but had it's affect. A trickle of blood flowed from the wound and Mira clutched her arm.

"What did you do!?!?!"
"I cut you arm, and what's coming out of you right now is blood."
"How do i stop it?"
"Here." Deru ripped his shirt in half and handed a piece to her. She blinked and stared at the cloth.
"What do i do with this?"
"Wrap it around your leg tightly." Deru demonstrated by bandaging his leg first. He helped Mira bandage her arm.
"What's happening? This isn't what usually happens..." Mira whispered.
"I dunno, a hacker?"
"But there hasn't been a hacker here for decades! The GM's got rid of them along time ago!"
"Maybe they found away through but i gotta see my friend, maybe he knows what's going on."
"Hey wait, i'm coming."
"Why? you hate me."
"But i needa know what's going on."
"Ok, but you gotta help me, i can't walk that well and if we get attacked because the peopel still thinks it's a game, you gotta help me there too."
"Yeah ok." Deru put his arm around Mira and she sorta dragged him along as he hopped on his other foot.

Deru burst into his room where Tech still was. Mira came in behind him holding her sword and cleaning it from all the blood. Tech slapped Deru on the back.

"Nice going man, you just got the hottest girl, and best killer to come with you to your room, want me to leave you two along?"
Deru punched Tech back. "This is serious man, something happened."
"What? putting ketchup on your leg is serious?" Tech scoffed.
"No, this is blood."
"Ha yeah right." Tech wiped at the blood on Deru's leg and licked it off his hand.
"...Oh shyt, that is blood..."
"Exactly, but what's blood doing in Gunz?"
"I dunno, there shouldn't be any blood in gunz though!"
"I know, that's what i said. Now i'm asking you."
"Maybe a hacker?"
"Maybe but Mira told me the GM's patched the hacks already."
"Well i think i might know."
'"What? Tell me."
"It's us."
"What about us?"
"We're not from this world. We're disrupting the flow of Gunz, there for making it more realisticish."
"HAHAH! This sounds like one of those corny stories. Next thing you know we're trying to find a way home to save the entire gunz world. Oh noes! the world is gunna end! we gotta save it!" and Deru laughed again. "But anyways Tech, we need find out what's going on, i suggest we see a GM."
"Good idea Deru" and Tech began leaving. But Mira blocked the way. When he tried to walk around her, she stopped him.
"What's your problem girl?"
"If you can actually "die" now, do you think it's smart to walk outside with out your guns?"
"Yeah, cause you can protect me."
Mira fumed. "Just because i use to be one of the best players doesn't mean i want to protect you."
"Ok point taken." Tech snatched up his smg's from the bed and then got ready to walk out.
"Deru you ok man?"
"Yeah Tech, just gimme a second." Deru quickly changed shirts and put on a new bandage. He got a new pair of revolvers from his drawer and put them in his belt.
"Ok lets go Tech and Mira."
(Still writing...)

Maelnin
02-17-2008, 04:06 PM
Vegemite Would constructive criticism be appreciated on this thread? Vegemite

devilnflesh2
02-17-2008, 04:09 PM
ive been reading too many stories, im sure its good, but if its not related to gunz it goes in the style section said devilnflesh

Maelnin
02-17-2008, 04:13 PM
ive been reading too many stories, im sure its good, but if its not related to gunz it goes in the style section said devilnflesh

Vegemite It's a story about Gunz. Vegemite

ZXKatana
02-17-2008, 04:16 PM
well the prolouge is only the intro, i'm still writing you know

meandme
02-17-2008, 04:16 PM
Care for constructive criticism?
:I wouldn't buy it.

Maelnin
02-17-2008, 04:23 PM
Vegemite It's where the story's headed that bothers me the most. The "sucked into a game world" concept has been horribly over-used, but bringing Gunz into the real world offers even less creative opportunities as far as I can tell. I once wrote a story for an online game and it worked out much better when everything was based inside the game itself. Obviously it's your choice on what to write about but I think it's a bit of a dull starting point. Vegemite

ZXKatana
02-17-2008, 04:34 PM
ok maybe writing a story was a bad idea but i don't give a dam
FLAME SHIELD IS ON
SPAM SHIELD IS ON
^_^ i'm prepared to face the punishment

Maelnin
02-17-2008, 04:39 PM
ok maybe writing a story was a bad idea but i don't give a dam
FLAME SHIELD IS ON
SPAM SHIELD IS ON
^_^ i'm prepared to face the punishment

Vegemite Nonono, write the story. So far only very few people have replied; one of whom seemed too lazy too actually read it, one who didn't have any decent point to make and one who's just trying to help. :D Even if the story does turn out as a failure I still think it's a good idea to write, if only to get better. And no matter how good you get, you're always going to get criticized so it's good to get use to that as well. Vegemite

ZXKatana
02-17-2008, 05:08 PM
i'm writing it cause i'm bored, but i'm use to criticizem. Basically that's the only thing that's told to me in my life...

Saad
02-17-2008, 05:20 PM
Very good story ^.^

MORE PLEASE xD

pie108
02-17-2008, 05:59 PM
VegemiteThe "sucked into a game world" concept has been horribly over-used, but bringing Gunz into the real world offers even less creative opportunities as far as I can tell. Vegemite

(RAWR) :O It's not real? I've been living a lie this ENTIRE time?! Why has no one ever told me! I thought I had to tell this guy what to do in order to stay alive.(RAWR)

_Aes_Sedai_
02-17-2008, 07:16 PM
I am posting here so It goes into my subscribed threads XD. I have not actually read it yet. I will at some point though.

ZXKatana
02-18-2008, 05:27 AM
lolz, >.< updated

Maelnin
02-18-2008, 02:49 PM
Vegemite I don't think I'll read the whole thing as you finish the story; it's not really my thing. Keep going though. Vegemite

Riuroky
02-18-2008, 03:49 PM
Vegemite It's where the story's headed that bothers me the most. The "sucked into a game world" concept has been horribly over-used, but bringing Gunz into the real world offers even less creative opportunities as far as I can tell. I once wrote a story for an online game and it worked out much better when everything was based inside the game itself. Obviously it's your choice on what to write about but I think it's a bit of a dull starting point. Vegemite

humm hack as an example?

ZXKatana
02-19-2008, 10:36 AM
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